Tomorrow, at least one high school English class in northern
Virginia will be listening to their teacher read aloud “the best” among all the
college essays or personal statements submitted to her by students in the class
for a grade. This will be after the class has engaged in an activity referred
to as “peer editing,” in which essays are exchanged, read and evaluated by
students in the class.
In other words, personal statements meant to be both
personal and confidential will be shared and showcased for the entire class to
appreciate, criticize and possibly comment on.
A document considered central to the college admissions process will be
passed around and subjected to class discussion promoted by a teacher, who while
well-meaning, is potentially breaching a student’s confidentiality and
arranging for feedback that is amateurish at best and possibly self-serving at
worst.
No one supports English teachers more than I do. I was one—albeit
for a very short time. And no one wants English teachers to teach students the
basics of expository writing and give them experience preparing self-reflective
essays more than I do. I read hundreds of essays each year, many of which
suggest to me that the student has never been asked to engage in this kind of
writing before. I want these lessons to
begin, but well before fall of senior year. I want students to have experience developing
personal statements of the sort required by colleges throughout middle and high
school. Why wait when communication and writing skills are considered so
important by colleges and they are relatively easy to develop under less
stressful conditions?
Peer editing can be a useful teaching device in which a student
learns from another when carefully supervised and controlled. In small groups
or on a one-to-one basis, students may be provided with opportunities to learn
about the process of accepting criticism and subsequently revising written
work. And it can work equally well in
early elementary years as in a freshman college writing seminar. I’m all for
it.
But when it comes to peer editing college essays, I have to
protest. In addition to sharing a document that really isn’t meant for sharing,
the feedback isn’t always so good. I’ve seen essays in which the peer editor
has provided unconstructive criticism and incorrectly corrected spelling and
grammar. I have had students lose confidence in the quality of their work based
on remarks provided by less-than-knowledgeable readers whose experience with
college admissions is by definition limited. Who needs that kind of help?
And while I hate to attribute negative motivations among peers,
it’s naïve to think that many of these students aren’t competing against one
another for admission to selective and highly-selective colleges and
universities. Sharing these kinds of personal
statements not only opens the work to self-interested criticism but also gives
away ideas for topics, formatting and approaches to essay prompts. Even if subconscious, it’s way too easy to
take someone else’s idea and run with it. And while we tell students to write
personal statements that none of their friends could write, these kinds of
exercises do anything but protect the uniqueness of a student’s independent
work.
Instead of reading aloud personal statements generated by
students in her class, the English teacher who has embarked on the mission of
helping her students with this project would do more of a service by reading
sample essays from other sources and generating discussions based on those
essays. I particularly like samples found on the Essay
Hell website or some of those provided by colleges themselves such as the
Johns Hopkins Essays
That Worked series or a similar collection put together by Connecticut
College. This avoids conflicts, comparisons
and possible questions about confidentiality.
And if what my students tell me is correct, it may make the lesson much
more valuable.
Thank you so much for this posting! Now I can read this to my students instead of telling them why they should perhaps disregard the editing notes they received in their English class. When I present in English classes at the high school, I always use the Johns Hopkins examples. The comments from admission are all the context the students need. I totally agree that "personal" should also mean confidential.
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